Dearest Wife,
I am ‘appy to tell you that I, Macbeth hath beaten Macdonald and the Norwegians. I killed Macdonald by stabbing him after he tried to knap me with a sword but I managed to dodge it and slice him from the nave to the skull. Me and Banquo walked upon a heath where we came into contact with three beings who told me I would be Thane of Glamis, Thane of Cawdor and King of Scotland. I thought they were zany at first but then i thought about it more and when I tried asking for more knowledge they turned into thin air and vanished. Me and Banquo left the heath immediately and met with the king where I was greeted and given the title of Thane of Cawdor. I cannot write for much longer but all I can say is that you could be queen if the prophecies the witches foretold are true,
Love Macbeth.
April 21, 2014 at 10:05 am
Hello Dion,
This is a clear account of the events of the story but there is very little of Macbeth’s thoughts and feelings here
Was this deliberate? How might you expand upon this?
Additionally, how might you use adverbs at the beginning of your sentences to give a clear sense of time and logical sequences for your reader?
Thanks,
Mr North
May 5, 2014 at 12:07 pm
Hi Dion,
When we discussed this is class it was clear your had understood all the plot elements of the action and that more of Macbeth’s feelings would develop the letter. You have considered this further from your first draft although it could be developed unless you have a reason for Macbeth not sharing too many of his feelings with his wife? Could this be shown in any way in the letter?
Also, you might consider how your adjectives and adverbs could be adapted to more aptly fit the tone of the action and Macbeth’s status (e.g. zany, dodge, knap) I felt these words were a little out of place for the tone of the rest of the letter, despite their meaning being accurately used.